Halloween is my favorite holiday, so you can imagine my excitement when I discovered a little Halloween writing contest over at Susanna Leonard Hill’s website. The Contest: 100 word Halloween story appropriate for children using the words: Creak, Broomstick, and Pumpkin. Piece of candy right?
Hope my story is a delightful treat for you all, and not some terrible trick gone wrong.
Enjoy!!
Trick or Treat?
Clank, Clank, went the knocker
and C-r-e-a-k, went the floor,
“Ahhh!!” Screamed the children,
when she opened up the door.
*
Cackle, Cackle, went her voice,
and C-r-e-a-k, went the door,
“Ahhh!!” Screamed the children,
as her broomstick left the floor.
*
Clip, Clop, went her boot heels,
and C-r-e-a-k went the floor,
“Ahhh!!” Screamed the children,
as her broom began to soar.
*
Flicker, Flicker, went the light,
and C-r-e-a-k went the door,
“Ahh!!” Screamed the children ,
knocking pumpkins to the floor.
*
Pitter, Patter, went their feet,
and C-r-e-a-k, went the floor,
“Ahh!!” Screamed the children,
running, running, from the door!
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Very nice! 🙂
Thanks so much!!
Great story! Poor kids. Happy halloween!
I know those poor kids, I used to be one of them lol. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!
Fun piece. Happy Halloween!
Thanks Carrie and a Happy Halloween to you too!!
Love the rhythm. This is very fun!
Thanks it was so much fun to write!!
The refrain is very effective. Fun story!
Thank you Joanna!
Frightfully good!
I love Halloween, and I love being scared. Thanks so much for your comment!
Very fun!
Thanks so much Lauri!
Ooh, this is terrific, Jean! I love the spooky mood, and I can just imagine those kids – jaws dropping, hearts thumping, at what they’re seeing! Thanks for a deliciously scary entry and for joining in the Halloweensie fun! 🙂
Susanna, thanks so much, and thanks for having this contest. I had a great time writing the story. I’m hooked on Halloweensie now!
Love all your sound words and the refrain of the screaming children!
Thank you Buffy, I seem to be surrounded by screaming children all day long, so it felt right having them scream in my story.
Fun alliteration and repetition! Nice to meet you in the Halloweensie crowd, Jean. 🙂
Thank you Wendy it’s so nice to meet you as well. As I said above to Susanna, I’m hooked on Halloweensie!
Your opening reminded me of song from a musical ” Clang, clang, clang went the trolley.” I agree with Joanna, your use of the refrain is most effective. Great entry.
I remember that song Patricia!! Thank you so much for your comments on my Halloweensie!
Very nice – I love the refrain in the third line.
Thank you Carrie!
Great sounds and nice repetition. But the poor kids didn’t get their treats…
Thanks Linda, but tricks are for kids!!
I like the refrain too. 🙂 Good luck!
Thank you Christie!!
Ooo the flickering lights are the creepiest part in my opinion! Great fun Halloweensie scare Jean!
Thank you Cathy, flickering lights are creepy!!
Great story! And it’s written with the littles in mind! 🙂
Thank you, and yes I had 3 littles in mind while writing this.